Jamiejoe Posted January 8, 2016 Share Posted January 8, 2016 Firstly i know this should not be in this section but i really want someone's opinions on a essay i wrote it would mean alot to me even if you guys would just read the first sentence. It's really important for my life right now Mellow Pop Gold - Jamie Kelly It’s when you’re all alone when your mind is the clearest, when you can reach every crack in your mind. Fish the largest memories from the deepest seas; like in the summer when i had her cradled in my arms and we watched the stars dance. The time that I just jumped. Not knowing what to expect when my body plunged into the ice cool oasis. That was before I lost it all, launched into the clouds becoming a servant to the World Wide Web. Instead of fishing for memories I was fishing for links, the latest Facebook trends. But weirdly enough in this moment I didn’t care about all that… Listening to Mellow Pop Gold, I realized how much it actually means to live, for the past 15 years I have thrown away my life staring at 21 inches of HD animated reality, a world advertised by the highest bidder used to cloak what is going on outside my cavity which I’m ashamed to call home. My like to dislike ratio meant more to me then my personal reputation, my life has been sucked into this vortex. I never thought pixels could become my master. I wanted to make a lasting impact on the world, but sitting here wasting oxygen thinking to myself that if I click share people would change, though people still go past my page ignoring even the most important points. A graceful 2 years and 2,000 tweets later i finally realised that 140 characters would never change anything, to anyone. Ever. Injecting myself with my daily dosage of vines seemed like the only doorway into happiness, but even after the stupid six short seconds was up my body craved more. If i wasn’t forced on pressing the replay button i was only one tap away from another hit of the unlimited supply, only this drug came free. nah the ending i think is so good have a look tho The soft tunes of Corey Harper bounce into my ears, slow vibration of my eardrums release my mind to true creativity, the soft B’s start a continuous fission reaction brushing against all lobes of my brain. But I can “See the sadness creepin’ through the window”. Still I had not got up, I felt it was my duty to let the world know about this sudden revelation but my body had it began to quiver to the beat, for the first time it overcame my mind and I got up leaving that world behind but my mind was still imploding, for the first time I did not have to cast a spell to turn my world upside down. All these emotions ironically remind me of my Facebook feed small snippets of emotion however this is no cyber highway, you cannot just surf by these emotions you cannot deleted this history. My body responds to each and every detail of these true emotions likes a new experience of life I slowly lean back in my chair but I cannot stop typing. Full stops are endings but a paragraph gives new hope. It feels strange in a way my body has taken over and combined with my mind a force to be reckoned with a force even I thought was uncontrollable. Even now I see myself-punching away at my keyboard, each keystroke the sweat of anger builds up on the tips of my fingers. They begin to slowly ache, only to make them type faster like an addict but not to drugs. Qwerty is what controlled me. We no longer communicate with emotions instead Cambria Body is the world’s native language. As I look away from the screen I feel my body shutting down slowly fading into black, however this black clears my mind and opens my lungs like a rusting machine I slowly switch on my cogs begin to turn and let the old “me” fade back into the vortex. I sit there silently for a while silently contemplating on what had just happened wondering where have I been for the last 15 years. My mind has been constantly bombarded; Text’s Call’s Like’s Snap’s. I thought it made me a better person but the fact was that it slowly chipped away at my armour and now I have opened my eyes. Shut down my phone, turned off the power supply and finally realized that all these level up’s has just put me down. Now I see just how small the World Wide Web actually is. I just wish you could all get your heads out of the Cloud. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GIGGS Posted January 8, 2016 Share Posted January 8, 2016 Solid fucking shit man, 10/10 would publish as a book Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bwuk Posted January 8, 2016 Share Posted January 8, 2016 Is this for a class? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AC Josh Posted January 8, 2016 Share Posted January 8, 2016 that is deep as hell man. sounds amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adamant Posted January 8, 2016 Share Posted January 8, 2016 this is on another level for sure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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angelzpkr Posted January 9, 2016 Share Posted January 9, 2016 very descriptive writing style man, 2 thumbs up~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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noobin28 Posted January 9, 2016 Share Posted January 9, 2016 not bad at all good job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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